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Tuesday, November 7, 2017

Here is a link to the video that we watched the ocean maker

can I please get feed back


In the desert where there were mountains, rooks and cliffs where it uost to be the sea it was dusty it was windy it was dry it hadn't rained in a long time.
It was dry there was a girl she flies a plane she had a plan to make a rain make so it rain she died the end.

3 comments:

  1. Top In The Morning To Ya
    Hi my name is Josh and it sounds like a great to tell your friends.
    Later I will have a look at it.
    How did she died?
    Joshua
    Room 4
    Drummond school

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  2. Hi my name is Toby.I liked how you used descriptive writing in you story. But how did she die? and how did she make it rain? Maybe you could have said something like 5 hours earlier. I hope this comment encouraged you to make more epic blog posts.
    Blog ya later!

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  3. I really like your slide show because I like hot bogs to and your motorbike's on your slide show.I would like to see more slide show.look at my blogs.https://wpsjacoba.blogspot.co.nz/2018/01/welcome.html#comment-form

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