WALT: Write a letter to a camp parent or camp leader
Use paragraphs for each new idea
Use interesting words
Edit our writing with a buddy to make it even better
Reflect on our writing using a rubric
If your parent went on camp, please write a letter to another person and give your own parent a big hug next time you see them.
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14 / 3 / 2016
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Kauri / Rimu
Yaldhurst Model School
Christchurch
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Dear James,
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(Paragraph 1): In this paragraph you introduce yourself and thank the person for being at camp (at least 30 words).
Key words: enjoyed, fantastic, awesome, challenging, tiring, delicious, scrumptous, crazy, parents, Hanmer Springs, Forest Camp
Hi, I am Hunter from Yaldhurst Model School and I am writing this letter to say thank you for helping us out on camp. You were cool .
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(Paragraph 2): In this paragraph you tell your person what you enjoyed about camp and what you remember most about the person that you are writing to (aty2ur euuw words).
Key words: hydroslide, tree climbing, waterfall track, mountain, mission impossible, orienteering, grass, Conical Hill, paint game, lazy river, Rusty Carrot, Activity Hanmer, swimming, hot pools, thermal, sliding, waterslide, cabins, tiring, tidying, enjoyed
Write here
I really enjoyed going down the hydroslide. I really enjoyed climbing the trees.
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(Paragraph 3): In this paragraph you ask the person some questions about their camp experience. These should be questions that you actually want an answer to (at least 30 words).
Key word
Did you have fun ? What food did you like ? Were you tired ?
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(Paragraph 4): This is the concluding paragraph where you thank the person again for taking part, sum up your feelings about camp this year and end with a positive comment about the person (at least 30 words
Key words:
Write here: Thank you for taking us to camp. I hope you had fun too.
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Yours sincerely
Hunter
When you have finished writing your letter:
1. Read it out loud to yourself.
- Does it make sense?
- Do I need to add or change anything?
2. Have a buddy reading conference.
- Use the sheet in your writing book.
3. Make any changes you need to.
- Use tools and fix spelling.
4. Add some pictures from above.
- Or ask Mr M if he has some others you could use.
5. Mark your recount using the rubric below.
6. Get a buddy to mark your recount using the rubric.
7. Ask Mr M to mark your recount.
8. Post your recount on your learning blog.
9. Comment on the recounts on other blogs.
- Remember to use the shared blog comment sheet
Marking My CAMP LETTER
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What I need to do
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Me
/ 5
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Buddy / 5
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Mr M
/ 5
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1. PARAGRAPHS
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Each paragraph is about ONE main idea.
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4
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4
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2. SENTENCE STARTERS
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Sentences begin with different words.
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2
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4
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3. VOCABULARY
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The right words (key vocab) have been used to add detail and say exactly what you mean, and make sense.
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1
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3
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4. LANGUAGE
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Writing makes sense.
My writing flows smoothly.
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2
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3
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I
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Capitals are used when needed.
Full stops are used at the end of sentences.
EXTRA: Commas, question marks, speech marks and exclamation marks used in the right places ( . , ! ? " ").
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3
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4
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6. HOW DID I DO?
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Total points (of 25 points)
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12
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18
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Me: Star and a wish
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Star: I like how many words I used.
Wish: I wish that I used fullstops.
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Buddy: Star and a wish
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Star:I liked how Hunter used capital letters and some fullstops.
Wish:I think that Hunter could improve by adding some more details.
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Mr M: Star and a wish
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Star:
Wish:
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