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In the desert where there were mountains, rooks and cliffs where it uost to be the sea it was dusty it was windy it was dry it hadn't rained in a long time.
It was dry there was a girl she flies a plane she had a plan to make a rain make so it rain she died the end.
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ReplyDeleteHi my name is Josh and it sounds like a great to tell your friends.
Later I will have a look at it.
How did she died?
Joshua
Room 4
Drummond school
Hi my name is Toby.I liked how you used descriptive writing in you story. But how did she die? and how did she make it rain? Maybe you could have said something like 5 hours earlier. I hope this comment encouraged you to make more epic blog posts.
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